Wall.

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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    Wall.

    These walls they fall upon my dreams, waking me up to reality,
    These humbled golden threads unwoven and undone for me to see,
    What goes up must come down, be it love, hope or mine glorious days,
    You’ll be shattered in just one day, in so many hideous ways.
    I transform my delights into something unpleasant, knowing the last days near,
    I crumple all my necessities like life, away in a corner, hiding from fear.
    Even a streak of sunlight doesn’t question the black shadows that’ll reign,
    It’ll all tumble down from the walls that had held away from me my pain.
    Why bring down civilians hopes and gather now the cursed to destroy?
    Why steal the girl’s doll? Why hurt the boy’s train? Why harm universal joy?
    Why does the harp stop playing now, when we seem to need it most?
    Why do the dead foe soldiers return in blood masks as ghosts?
    Is it too much for a mother to love her child and tell her to take care?
    Is it harmful and indecent for a lover to tell her how much for her he’d bear?
    Can’t the wall that saved us from the evil floods all these ages, live?
    Can’t the humanity we had, teach you to stop snatching, and instead, give?

    I’ll call upon no guardian, for I have none who’d sacrifice a soul for such a cause,
    For now they make those lights and those false truths, and for nothing, an applause.
    I’ll call upon no help, for I can’t find any, but I’ll hang myself before the villains,
    For I shall fight them alone, to uphold this blessed wall, or die in the menial dungeons.


    comments please... ^_^
     
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    Linja

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    Really, really nice. I guess you've gotten over your Writer's Block, then?
     
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    Friskey™

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    Really good ^_^
     
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    Messy Marj

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    It's great. Everything you write is great really heh <3
     
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    El Muerto

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    Great, just great
     
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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    really?

    i thought it sucked. i don't think my writer's block is over yet.

    thanks a lot guys! ^_^
     
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    Ether

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    it's good.....not your best...but good
     
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    Arhaz

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    Thanks Ether ^_^
     
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    GrafiTTied

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    its ok, obviously you can better than that,
    maybe you need inspiration of some sort?.
     
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    Ether

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    no problems....keep up this shit though!
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    I really liked it :)
    I thought it was very good, your defninently getting over your writers block, nice work.
     
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    Linja

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    Definitely. Sorry, I just had to point it out. :blush:
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    You got talent and you're showing it the right way.


    Good job.
     
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    Arhaz

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    thanks. ;)


    looks like you've been doing your home work in Writer's Cove...lol
     

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