The Harbor Watch Inn

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    Darcy

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    I don't think I've posted this one yet. Another folk song, I enjoy constructive criticism, just be honest, you know what to do...

    The Harbor Watch Inn
    Kick up dust in the road with the dirt in the cracks
    Where the pavement below us corrodes
    A distant smell of smoke in the air
    Marks the dawn of the winter I know
    I haven't been here as long as you have
    But I've seen how impressions can shift
    When the shingles hang down and the vines scale the walls
    In the house that I grew up in

    You used to sit on that front porch for hours
    Just watching the ocean change tides
    You'd curse when your glass was knocked over and drained
    I still smile at the stain of red wine
    Though it's been ten long years since you took that way out
    And three since I've been to that place
    I can still see you bloodshot with a smirk
    No blurred time line could wipe out that face

    Broken bottles and cigarette butts
    Paint the ground from the shore to the pier
    I've still got scars on my feet from those nights
    Walking barefoot from home to out there
    Where the fog sits all morning on broken down cars
    And the people trade glances to prove
    That they've got their own places or speak their own language
    That they've got a better excuse

    This smokey room slurred the words that you used
    Took the wind out of lungs fit to breathe
    I can't waste time sorting fiction from truth
    For these fucked up ideals that you preach
    I close my eyes, take illusions in stride
    Cut my losses and try to escape
    But these engines won't turn when there's no fuel to burn
    We're all stalled in the lanes that we made
     
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    Will

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    You know, I'm surprised no one's commented on this. I think it's beautiful. I sat here and was singing it to myself (or at least singing it the way I heard it in my head when I was reading it). It's really well done.
     
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    That is actually awesome. It's really well written I think :)

    And I agree with Will about singing it to myself :lol:
     
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    Linja

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    *applauds* Fabulous, Darcylove, I really, really like it.
     
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    Darcy

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    Aww thank you all! Making people sing my words - that is my goal! Yay.
     

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