The Escapist

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    _PianoPaPercut_

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    anywho.. heya all! i just thought i'd submit a poem i made.. and yeah.. tell me watchu guys think.. poetry isnt really my strong point.. but i gave it a go anyway.. heh.. so yar.. i'm open to negative and positive criticism.. anywho.. here you go.. ^_^ [thanky to all who actually took the time to read it or even to bothered to do so.. *sighs*.. ^_^]
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    "The Escapist"

    when you cant take it anymore
    you leave the real world behind to open a door,
    that takes you back to your lonely reality
    your world of unwanted hate,
    unwanted love,
    unwanted life.

    you created a world to take comfort in
    a place where it was safe to stay hidden.
    a place where you were able to feel forever free,
    somewhere in which you can keep your sanity,
    it's fading away,
    you're loosing control.

    memories play out images of monsters
    that have constantly shunned your every move,
    cursed your existence so they could prove
    that you are completely worthless,
    completely useless,
    completely hopeless.

    running from problems because you can't hide
    feeling fear and confusion deep inside,
    but you stop at the edge of a cliff to a thought
    that running isn't the answer anymore,
    but it's easy,
    it's the only way.

    searching for keys that you cant seem to find
    trying to forget chaos; you need peace of mind.
    your resolution is an unknown blur of wonder,
    yet underneath it there is an answer you still ponder,
    your departure,
    your bitter end.

    keeping the last thought in mind as a last resort,
    you have always known that it wasn't the best choice.
    but in two dimesions that don't fit your way,
    there is no point of your stay.
    leave now,
    no one cares.

    you have become an escapist; warp in and out.
    its tough and you cant take this; scream and shout.
    your world created; lost the light of serenity.
    asking yourself, "what will become of me?"
    no answers,
    only escape again.

    just like before when you can't take it anymore,
    simply leave both worlds behind and open another door,
    that will take you to another reality,
    your new world of less apprehension,
    more peace,
    more life.
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    Andrea

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    That was very good! Keep on writing. ;)
     
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    _PianoPaPercut_

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    hehe.. *woohoo* one comment!! heh... thanky..
     
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    That's really good! :) Keep it up! :D
     
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    That i sreally cool :D
     
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    i really liked this part.
     
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    _PianoPaPercut_

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    thanks for all the comments.. i'm glad you liked it..
     

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