Into the cold, damp darkness where the voices roar… Lost within a world, unforgiving and unwilling… Within the experimentation of our own selves… Here is your punishment, Jesus… A man lost inside his head… Walking the maze of paths, being led… Deeper and deeper and deeper and… Nobody knows, nobody cares and… Nobody understands… In the cold, damp darkness where the silence rumbles… Lost within a world, so confusing and hypnotic… Within the imagination of myself, no ending, mesmerized Lost within a train of thought, exploring the kingdoms… The sphere of reflection manifests itself in my mind… As I plummet down the spiral of the third eye… Oh, how I wish… I could step into your eyes… Walk into your mind… Grasp the power that you wield… Oh, how they beg for you… Worship you… So lost without you… Oh, how I wish… They would all die Here is your punishment, Jesus… For your word… For your lies… Here is your punishment, Slave… Now beg… Worship me… Here is your punishment, Friend… Bow to me, As they bow to you.
Nice, not your best, but you've written so many completely amazing poems i hardly expect you to best yourself each time. Not much to comment about, you just a natural writter. Good Job
yeah, i would have to agree with david. i like it but it's not your best, although i like the concept that you have used. i really like the flow of this bit!