She was the girl who never smiled She was the girl who hid She was the girl who always cried She failed in all she did She was the girl who never talked She was the girl in the dark She was the girl that no one loved The girl without a spark She was the girl who always felt cold She was the girl with no life She was the girl who sat alone And cut herself with a knife She was the girl with an ugly face Black smudges were there from crying She was the girl with a heart of darkness She was the girl who was dying She was the girl who was a failure A girl who could never ‘be’ She was the girl who hated herself This was the girl that is me Comments are appreciated.
That is very deep, and personal, but I'm glad it seemed as though you put alot of effort into it, which you probably did! I love it! 8/10
umm, easy with that one! :wth: overall, it's really a good poem. will be excellent if u could just polish the words variety a 'lil bit... well, sometimes i also have the difficulties in creating one of my own... i'm looking forward for ur next post.
Hey, I love that poem!! Keep up the writing!! To tell you the truth, that girl sounds a bit like me I better get going now! Peace out!!
Thats so ####### awesome. Especially how you saw "This was the girl that is me" in the end. Good Job, 10/10