Rest Your Head

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    Darcy

    Darcy LPA Super Member LPA Super Member

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    I appreciate constructive criticism...you know the drill.

    Rest Your Head
    Ashes through the windows as they let the buildings burn
    I’m back here counting hours as I strain to find the words
    But I know nothing can be made from false depictions of the truth
    And battles can’t be won until the rights are passed to you

    Don’t jump the gun, don’t sound alarms
    At least not until we’re armed
    With verses built of lines to kill
    The blood that’s spilled for the victory march

    Now it’s etched into the memories of a thousand victim eyes
    But in one ear and out the other, back up, state the time
    The place, the reasons, there are none, they said that nothing can be done
    But poison is the guilt that tells you what you’re hiding from

    So rest your head and fuck the strain
    That follows every paper chase
    Abuse their deafness to the freedom fighter
    Rolling in his grave

    What is freedom if we’ve got no time to break out from the crowds
    And follow all the roving dreams we never were allowed
    To walk a night in different shoes and wear down through the soles
    Or breathe the salt and gasoline on every coastal road

    There’s just so much to take in
    Beyond the crimes that we commit
    So revel in the light of
    Our enduring right to live
     
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    Will

    Will bread crumbs & white stones LPA Addicted VIP

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    Oh that's just lovely, my dear. I like it a lot.

    It reminds me of some pieces of tried to write, but they were always too straightforward. Yours isn't straightforward, but still gets at what you're trying to say. Which is what I like about it.

    And your vocabulary...is just amazing.
     
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    Linja

    Linja Good. Be magnanimous. Über Member

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    Amazing, Darcy, I love how all your pieces just work.
     
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    Darcy

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    Thanks loves. :)
     
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    Arhaz

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    it's beautiful. majestic in it's own desperate way if you know what i'm trying to say. thumbs up for working those long lines. it's a masterpiece if you want to lengthen it and enhance it. but fantastic! i swear.
     

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