I liked the first poem the best, it was literally awesome and it gets an extra point because I'm a quarter Indian The other one is good too. Well done
Quarter Indian? Cool....thanks a lot for the comments, really appreciate it. I don't think I can match India ... a Vision though... ... Oh well, it doesn't hurt anyone to try...
Sorry, I didn't reply to this comment before. Thanks a lot, as I've mentioned before, I'm overwhelmed. I've tried song-writing but the two I wrote were terrible: One was very marshmallow-worldy-ish. and the other was so emo that you'd puke with the emoness of it all...I can't really get the whole sounding amazing in simple words thing, which is something lyric-writers/song-writers have mastered...I'll surely try, though, once again...AFTER my evil french exam goes kaput!
ooo shit..i m sorry dat i dint post a reply...i read the poems more than 7 times i think...and everytime i read it i guess i kinda go through some KINKY EMOTIONS (wateva dat means)....and then 4get to post a reply....anywayz dude...THIS WAS ABSOLUTELY ACEEE!!!!.....darn...i guess i m kinda in love with the word "ace"....
Even though I'm more of a song writer than a poet... *is ashamed to post his work along-side poems as good as those*
I'm back! YAY! Two blissful months of absolutely NO school! |CHRYSALIS of DEJECTION| - Thanks a lot for the comments. I really appreciate your comments- it was just a little eligeble though. Minor error- I know, since this is the net, people usually find it convenient to abbreviate words or punctuate unessicarily...but the LPA doen't take to that kindly. I'm not taking a dig at you or anything- especially since you were nice enough to compliment my poem, but if there's one thing I've learned while I was at the LPA- proper grammer/spelling is a must. Trust me, people will respect you more. And I'm just going to reread and comment on you're poem, by the way. a life in ashes- I can't belive you'd write something like that. I'm sure it's a one time thing, my third poem type is fading somewhere into oblivion at the Message boards...*runs to read a life in ashes' poem and increase inferiority complex (mine not yours)*