So, it's been a long time since I've posted any of my writing && I'm sure a lot of you have no clue who I even am either. But yeah... I have a few songs, I want to post up to see what people think of them, so please, please... give me some feedback, good or bad. 'it's rude for the dying to laugh' footsteps can be heard from across the courtyard with every step taken, another life is lost but sympathy is something i know nothing about so you can fall from the highest mountain top i won't be around any time soon to hear you hit the ground there are seven ways to die, so hold on tight lets take this car and find the shore line tie this cinder block to your feet and dive right in pray to god that you don't make it out of this alive you'll find that gasping for air is the last thing you want soon the sea floor will be the only place you can call home there are seven ways to die, so hold on tight lets take this car and find the shore line you can't hear heartbeats underwater but at least the waves sound the same but at least the waves sound the same there are seven ways to die, so hold on tight lets take this car and find the shore line 'i entrust my dream to a shooting star' with every word i've said and with all these thoughts in my head yeah, i know, i know, it's all just a constant reminder of you but you know, you know, nothing will ever come easy so c'mon, darling, be strong for me and i'll be strong for you you're falling from the sky, but don't worry i'll be the concrete just to catch your fall the ocean stretches so far, but i'll be your lighthouse, so you'll see me and i'll see you, where ever you decide to go even if the wind knocks us over, will regain our balance so c'mon, darling, breath for me and i'll breath for you you're falling from the sky, but don't worry i'll be the concrete just to catch your fall i said, "girl, you're the dreams people won't re-call when they wake, but through the day they wish they could remember it" she said, "boy, you're a perfect moment that is so cliche, but through the day everyone is repeating it" you're falling from the sky, but don't worry i'll be the concrete just to catch your fall 'when did karma become the new trend' even stars break under the most sever circumstances constellations are torn from the sky, but not one question asked and i wish i could have whispered these words into your ear while your fingers were wrapped around my neck but not even i can re-write history, you'll be the only one written in the stars from now on paper mache hearts break, crack, and fall to the ground no matter how perfect they seemed, nothing is better then the real thing words can never be forgotten, to bad i never got them out, echos escape the walls, screaming the secrets i never told so please let warwoves tear me apart until nothings left have my blood spill, engrave there teeth marks into my skin and soon enough it will become clear the next chapter has nothing to say paper mache hearts break, crack, and fall to the ground no matter how perfect they seemed, nothing is better then the real thing this is just a plain and simple goodbye and i can no longer save my breath this is just a plain and simple goodbye and i can no longer save my breath this is just a plain and simple goodbye and i can no longer save my breath paper mache hearts break, crack, and fall to the ground no matter how perfect they seemed, nothing is better then the real thing paper mache hearts break, crack, and fall to the ground 'heartbeats felt in stomachs' the febuary sun burns so bright tonight romance will flow through my veins i'll light the candles and stare into your eyes let our hearts, let our hearts entwine i'm a car wreck and you're an angel sent from above you fell from the sky and onto my windows ledge i'll drain my blood and empty it in this pen i'll write your name across the moon i hope you see it, i hope you see it tonight you are what i've been longing for i'm a car wreck and you're an angel sent from above you fell from the sky and onto my windows ledge i'll write this note and send it across the ocean surface the current of the waves will make sure it finds it's way to you 'every constellation needs a star' we stare at ourselves in puddles on street corners all the peddales are falling, love me, love you not i made a promise i couldn't keep and i hope to god you don't forgive me a ending without a start, a eulogy without a death, maybe this went by to quick this towns a heartattack and your first on my list i made a promise i couldn't keep and i hope to god you don't forgive me all the writing on the walls tell the secreats no one tell i said if there a will, theres a way baby, i lied all the writing on the walls tell the secrets i made a promise i couldn't keep and i hope to god you don't forgive me i made a promise i couldn't keep and i hope to god you don't forgive me i made a promise i couldn't keep and i hope to god you don't forgive me 'my dear, lets tie up loose ends' your letters fall through the cracks in the floor bones break and shatter with questions no more agony overtakes the world with no remourse triping over phone cords, smashing teeth against concrete blood has a way with causing headaches your face has a way with mixing my thoughts grab my hand and tell me your favorite story i still remember, i still remember bodies made of cancer, hands full of splinters this voice plays in my head over and over ripping hair from the scalp, i can't make myself forget reading brail as if i was blind, words written on the floor, i can't make myself, i can't make myself your face has a way with mixing my thoughts grab my hand and tell me your favorite story i still remember, i still remember tear apart the sky, tear apart the sky she was taken, she was taken oh dear god, oh dear god give her back, please give her back your face has a way with mixing my thoughts grab my hand and tell me your favorite story i still remember, i still remember your face has a way with mixing my thoughts grab my hand and tell me your favorite story i still remember, i still remember 'sink this ship and fill the halls with water' plains fall from the sky and burn wholes in the ground, like shooting stars we walk along sidealks, dodging cracks in the pavement ladies and gentalmen, this is your captain speaking gather your belongings, it's time to abadon ship sound the alarm, sound the alarm close your eyes, close your eyes take a deep breath, sink or swim cars collide with street signs, it looks like someons not going home tonight the skidmarks in the snow will tell us everything we need to know ladies and gentalmen, this is your captain speaking gather your belongings, it's time to abadon ship sound the alarm, sound the alarm close your eyes, close your eyes take a deep breath, sink or swim
They're awesome! Really love every song.. I've noticed one thing and that is your lyrical theme sounds much like that of Evanescence, and I'm a huge fan of Evanescence, Especially for their way of writting songs.. So it's a thumbs up from me
Thank you very much. && Evanescence? Really? How odd, I don't listen to them... like at all. xD But again, thank you. Anybody else want to give me some feedback?
Each one of them is wonderful! And yeah, your writing is similar to Amy Lee´s writing, but I´m a fan of Evanescence, so I love your writing.
"When did karma become the new trend" is my favorite. It's really clever IMO. I like it a lot...hooked me right there with the very first few words
Thanks a lot, that is one of my personal favorites, my old band and I made a song for it, it was so fun to play, lots of pig squeals and all that cool stuff. xD