I thought the subject was ace, man, this was nice! If you used a diferent rhyme pattern it would have worked better, maybe break it up into...
I might post it here, chapter by chapter, like one chapter a week, since right now its half-done and is already at 5,000 words. Man I have so many...
very nice, do you have music set to it yet?
Carnival World In the Carnival built on false beams The sinister rule in unfailing power As the unknowing forfeit their dreams I will wait...
Hi, been sometime since I have posted, but this is good news. A Chester and Mike solo album, this is a dream come true, hopefuly LP have been...
I was away for awile in Turkey, which is why I havent posted in some time, but the first thing I did when I returned was watch Batman Begins, such...
Well it is if you think about that... all the Star Wars episodes had them, though. [/b] Lucas is paying homage to the old 1940's serial comics,...
this is what hapened when you take time to sit work on your poem, it is really excellent! Easily the best you have ever written, hat off to you.
thank you all very much, i am :blush: any way, changed the title to "The Unmarked", because I didnt like this one much...any more comments are...
The Unmarked On this barren world, torn from mercies side, my feet find footing. Scorching sand is hurled, through the wind along with pride,...
One of your best, you show alot of tallent here, I love it!
Congrats LP, well done.
Many believe one of two things, A. She is talking about her adopted mother, maybe having no knowlage at all of a real mother. B. She saw her...
very nice, flowed great! I got a Killers/Linkin Park vibe from it B)
Did anyone find the death of Kidadi-Mundu [sp?] the most saddening? It was snowing, and it showed him absolutely kicking ass in front of all his...
Wow, was really allot better than I thought it would be walking into the theater. Lots of fan boys were there, dressed up and decked out in Jedi...
The song is pretty good, the video; for taking place in a huge warehouse/hanger,[a rather boring setting] is actually pretty good: pulled off...
Thank you all for comments.
Tis good, but the title is a little bland, might I make a suggestion, go with something a little more spicy, maybe, "Fear That Beckons"...
I wrote a rap verse i thought might fit, if you want to use rap, the verse even flows right into the choris In this life ever wonder, lies...
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