Yes, it is a very long title. You had me walking on air but as things come to a close we accept what we know life just isn't fair Held my soul as if I saw a bird lift it's wing Take flight from atop a tree Soar into the vast and empty skies a paradise Saw a light from a small crevice Peeked in and and blinked twice That hole was my heart alight Setting fire to a desolate night And somehow I survived
Not much to say here, just pointing out that crevice doesn't rhyme with twice, if that's what you were going for.
I know. I wasn't really trying to make things rhyme. It just came out that some of it did. Or maybe I was trying to do it subconciously. but anyway.. I was trying to write a story.. without many words. to explain this this particular poem, is about a guy, and a girl. the guy was in love with this girl, and he thought the love felt really natural, which is the first stanza, like a bird flying for the first time, and flying to wherever it could, with total freedom, a paradise. (love) the second stanza, is about a break up, the love was there, which is the light, but as he looked deeper he saw that it was fading, blinking twice, to him, it felt like firing burning up his heart, and so he became very lonely. but in the end, he survived it
Well I thought you were, because if you look at the last two couplets, they look like they were meant to rhyme. Apologies.