you kill me

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    Fractured

    Fractured Well-Known Member

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    Your love, so rare but true
    Inside you hide something about you
    It kills me everyday knowing what it is
    Knowing you're in pain because you lost someone you thought you loved
    Knowing I can never replace something you once loved

    Your pain inside comes out at night in your emotions
    In the way you attempt to make love
    In the way you touch me
    In the way your eyes look when they meet my eyes

    I want you to know I'm here for you
    I want to take your pain away
    Put you in a beautiful place
    I want to make you feel beautiful again

    Your pain inside is something new
    something very untrue
    something just to get to me

    Tonight your pain inside will be mine
    Tonight I'll die for your love.
     
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    Messy Marj

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    Very beautifully written. Great job!
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    Pretty good, didn't flow as well as it could in some sposts, but that isn't too much to worry about, there was a good message in the poem. Overall it was fairly good, keep writing, love to see more.
     
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    saunderitos

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    I second that

    overall though,quite good
     

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