Your love, so rare but true Inside you hide something about you It kills me everyday knowing what it is Knowing you're in pain because you lost someone you thought you loved Knowing I can never replace something you once loved Your pain inside comes out at night in your emotions In the way you attempt to make love In the way you touch me In the way your eyes look when they meet my eyes I want you to know I'm here for you I want to take your pain away Put you in a beautiful place I want to make you feel beautiful again Your pain inside is something new something very untrue something just to get to me Tonight your pain inside will be mine Tonight I'll die for your love.
Pretty good, didn't flow as well as it could in some sposts, but that isn't too much to worry about, there was a good message in the poem. Overall it was fairly good, keep writing, love to see more.