Wonder

Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by The Outsider, Aug 16, 2005.

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    The Outsider

    The Outsider Billy Corgan = God

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    Tell me why i am here,
    alone with clenching fear.

    Followed back to the steed,
    I never wanted need.

    If you choke make my day,
    walk away like nothing was ever okay.

    Time became wasted in time,
    Dripping through these hands of mind.

    Crossed down to the border of my state,
    Loving nothing for you but pure hate.
     
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    saunderitos

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    :) is this your first poem/song thing ?

    anyway,quite good.Room for improvement ,some lines are a bit longer ,kinda drags a bit with large lines
     

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