What makes ( a poem)

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    Linz

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    What makes tomorrow different than today?
    I’m not gonna wake up to find me changed
    The wound inside me won’t just go away
    Instead it’s a memory always be in my head

    What makes tomorrow different than today?
    I’m not gonna wake up to find my peace
    The emptiness inside me won’t be filled by flee
    Instead I’ll have to face my fears

    What makes tomorrow different than today?
    What I lost, who I miss
    I don’t seem to find
    What makes me feel alive
    Is the clockwise

    So now are you going to start telling me it’s all going to be ok?
    Are you going to lie to me and say?
    That tomorrow is gonna be better than today

    hope u like it ^_^
     
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    vasiab

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    ^
    The last stanza is the best in my opinion!
    I think that the first stanza needs to be changed a bit so that it sounds better..
    :)
     
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    El Muerto

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    Nice job, I also like the last stanza the most. Keep it up :)
     

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