well today being ANZAC day i was inspired to write this. it's not how i usually write so i don't know what people will think but here it is. War is for the blind. We all march out, In a straight line, Ready for war, Ready to watch people die, We are here for our country, We’re here to fight with pride, To do what we’re told, And fight ‘till we die. We approach the battle field, Bloodthirsty and ready to kill, All these m*****f***ers, Who will get in our way To protect the land, That we call home, To fight cause our government, Told us so, So we sit with our guns, And open fire, Slaughter them all, One by one they fall, On the ground, Covered in blood, But no time to watch, As more troops come, So we fight and kill, Day after day, Waiting for the time we can go home, And be with those we love, Till then we will kill, Our enemy, For they try to kill us, But they won’t if they’re dead. So months go past, And nothing has changed, We keep mowing them down, Slaughtering them from night to day, I have no pity or mercy, Till I look into my victims eye, And see the pain and fear, That lays buried inside, Why am I killing? My fellow man, I have no beef with these people, Yet I’ve killed them with hate, These people want to go home, Just like we do, They don’t want to be here, Yet they fight for they must. We fight because we are blind, To the truths of peace, Cause we are deaf to reason, And follow what we are told. We are numb to the pain, Of our fellow man, We are do not enforce our will, But of those above us. So I stand up, With a tear in my eye, I cannot keep killing, People I don’t hate, I can’t keep destroying, I nation I have nothing against, I’ll put up a white flag, And surrender my self. I’ll stand and take, A bullet to my head, Cause I believe, That my god will save me, If not in this life, Then in the next, Then we will all be at peace, And then I can rest.
this was just...brill! i agree totally what your saying and the conformity that we have to do for the 'sake of our county' is just mad! and this bit, well...it's sooo good. i'm speechless!!!
LOL, that's kool, as it is out of my style i didn't know what sort of reaction i'll get, but yer i was inspired cause it was ANZAC day so yer. well i'm glad you like it. also (warning off topic) if people like my new avator. please don't knock it cause of the quality, i realise there is an issue witht he quality, mabye cause i cant use swf files in my avator even though i should [/endrant] Anyway thanks for your comments and i'm glad you like it. hope to get more positive feedback.
I really liked the poem,its awesome,more importantly it has a message in it,which is just great,but in the lines quoted above,does it mean you will kill people you hate,and destroy the country you are against(lol am kidding),I know it cant be taken literally,and one more thing,I am surpirised(or rather shocked) to see just one comment to such a good poem,where are the other poeple(I am not talking about those poeple who just post their poems and never comment on what others write and what they expect comment from others on their work wow,and you who know who those people are),anyways that was off topic,but surely this is one of your best poem till date,so keep it up(I need not tell this to you lol).great write.
Wow. That was really good. I loved it, especially your point. That was probably one of the best I've seen from you, either that, or this is just more my style. Very good though!
Thanks, all of you. i appriciate your comments as this was different for me. i'm glad to know that it is still good.