Walk with me...

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    arT saveS

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    "Shadows of Doubt"

    Are you blinded by the chaos that surrounds you?
    Are you deaf like the one who ignores you?
    Are you dumb like the beliefs you cling onto?
    Bow down and worship…
    The one who enslaves you…
    Bow down and worship…
    Your ignorance…
    He does not cater to your cries for deliverance
    He does not answer your calls for salvation
    He doest not believe in forgiveness…
    Walk with me into the shadows of doubt…
    And cast light onto the lies veiled by a shroud.
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    Very nice, i really like it. I like how you started with and, it felt like i was just bursting into the poem like it was a connection to alot of other things you've wrote yet different. hmmm, hope that made some sence.


    Also I love your new signature, great work.
    (^^I was not payed <s>much</s> to say this^^)
     
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    jaymez

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    You're a good writer. Maybe you could write me a song and I'll put music to it :whistle:
     
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    a life in ashes

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    awesome work as usual...
     
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    fallenangel

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    great work man!

    it's much simplier than most of your other stuff but it says exactly what you want to say!

    i really like it and i have to say that i agree with your thoughts on religion.
     
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    arT saveS

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    Thank you all very much. I appreciate all of you reading my work. I'm glad you like it. :)
     
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    El Muerto

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    short but awsome :D

    i like it very much
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    Awsome I really liked this one.
     

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