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    Ophelia

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    something totally random, not really sure what inspired this.

    I am what you want me to be
    nothing more, nothing less

    My sins stain me, inside and out
    The guilt is overwhelming.

    I pretend to be innocent
    but you know the truth.

    In that moment, looking into your eyes
    Innocence faded away.

    Screaming, pleading
    Looking for solace with you

    Waiting for peace
    I beg you to show me how to find it

    Innocence and guilt intertwined
    Suffocating me with their relentlessness for control

    I give in to the pain
    Taking my final breath.
     
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    Theazninvasion68

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    I like it. I get a sense of "was myself" vs "what I want to be" Push-pull. Inner-conflict.


    Probably was inspired by "what you've done" and how it is today, and your yearning for forgiveness of then.

    :) good poem, or i totally interpreted it wrong.
     
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    Ophelia

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    Thanks Robert.

    Seriously, it was just one of those things that came to me for no apparent reason. Glad you liked it though
    =)
     
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    It's not bad. I like how it's structured, I think that makes it pretty ominous, but I think it could maybe do with being a little less vague/more detailed.
     

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