Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by Nemesis23, Feb 19, 2009.

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    Nemesis23 Well-Known Member

    Apr 30, 2007
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    Hey guys, this is my first post here so far, but ive read many of your works and i am very impressed, and i felt i should share some of my own. so with out further adeau, here goes:

    I usually dont give titles to my pieces, just because i find them to be redundant a tad, the piece should really speak for itself and the reader should draw up their own title depending on how they see it.

    Lingering shadows
    are spread across the floor
    what once was here was crystal clear...
    but no more.

    The question is why
    you choose to subside
    and leave everything else behind
    you fake left, turn right, and refuse despite
    the signs calling you back
    its so easy for you to throw it away,
    but now you're stuck in the middle with nothing to say.

    If its so easy why are you still here?
    If its so easy, shouldnt you just dissapear?

    It wasnt intentional
    for you to be where you stand
    this whole place is fictional
    all drawn up by hand
    and if you even try to blink, you'll just be replaced
    leaving an outline so simple to trace

    If its so easy, why are you still here?
    If its so easy, shouldnt you just disappear?

    You cant.....
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    Theazninvasion68 It's like blood to a vampire, our tragic desire. LPA Super VIP

    Nov 9, 2004
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    i like the rhythm and the ending, how it leaves somewhat a hanger :)

    I like it!
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    El Muerto

    El Muerto LPA Super Member LPA Super Member

    Mar 16, 2005
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    That was pretty good, I'm looking forward to reading more from you. :)

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