Untitled (??How Do You Think I've Been??)

This is the song I've been working on for a little while, I posted it as Untitled and then this is the finished version..
I'm thinking about How Do You Think I've Been for the title, but I'm not sure so I'm asking you to rate the song and title...



Untitled (??How Do You Think I’ve been??)

I’m falling down again
Falling Deeper into sin
Thoughts of death are returning again
So how do you think I’ve been?

I'm ready to die cause,
I'm tired of trying when,
Everything goes wrong
I just can't stay strong
I've felt this way for so long

I’m falling down again
Falling Deeper into sin
Thoughts of death are returning again
So how do you think I’ve been?

I don't know what to do
No matter how hard I try,
I always lose
And I'm so confused
This life, I do not choose

I’m falling down again
Falling deeper into sin
Thoughts of death are returning again
So how do you think I’ve been?

So how do you think I’ve been
So how do you think I’ve been

I don't have any faith
And I'm just a waste
I can't take it anymore
Here's my gun, My last resort
The final mark in my lifes course
Good-Bye world

So how do you think I’ve been…

 

I like the title and the song. But I think you should take "Good-bye World" out.

 

Thanks, but..just wondering, But why do you think I should take it out? Cause I'm trying to make a point with it..you know..Hey, Imma kill myself, cya world, lol. I mean I'm not trying to be a smart ass, I just wanna know why..Like if you don't think it rhymes good or you just don't like that part

 

It rhymes perfectly. Its just that I feel its too childish comparing to the other things you said before it. But I might be just wrong.

 

Oh, ok. I see what you mean, I was just confused. Thanks though.

 

I like it.