i need your comments on this one please! Time. A moment of peace, and it slips away, A moment of grace that I give today. A moment that I push myself to find, A moment like this, and moments of its kind. A second to stand, wait and enjoy, A second to remember your childhood toy. A second to relish the first taste of rain, A second to blemish in torture and pain. A minute to dream, a minute to do, A minute to stare and say, “I love you”. A minute to remember all you forget, A minute to disappoint, cry and regret. An hour of freezing wait for love, An hour to buy and cage a dove, An hour to test the truth in you, An hour to hide evidences of a taboo. A day to love, a day to hate, A day to destroy, a day to create, A day to cherish the winter’s cold, A day to invent a fable well told. A week to realize all you’ve lost, A week in heat, a week in frost, A week with and end that is awaited, A week of grief and of being hated. A month to record the happiness and tears, A month to supply a fish net full of fears, A month to commit to your life once more, A month alone behind a locked door. A year of contemplation and learning, A year’s the time to count all your earnings, A year with parties and new found friends, A year that lives and finally ends. The time to notice all these things, Is all the happiness your life can bring, The times to choose, imagine and hear, It’s takes sometime to see things clear.
special it keeps behind new still the same subject didn't see something before on this forum (but i ain't here that long so ...) but i think something like that does already exicts
i reallylike this one! the repetion in this one was real nice and it provided a fantastic flow to it. this looks like you have put alot of thought and effort into this one and it really pays off! really fantastic work here! well done, another success!
Good flow but i didn't feel that power, the energy that i often get from your poems. So i didn't really like it as much sorry to say. Good try, Keep it up.
thanks a whole lot for your comments people... a very special thanks to fallenangel (Jenny) and David, who make it a point to comment on my poems...