Time To Heal

This song was written quickly, like all my other songs

2moro all my band members are getting together to prune all about 20 of our songs

so mayby we will have some good ones to show ya`ll

here is a 'demo'

i dont like the name time to heal, can u think of a better one?

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TIME TO HEAL
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Fallin down
to the ground i cant seem to wake up
this ground and the space that it takes up
to the floor
hit my head when im fallin
tryin to run when youve been crawlin
is this the end
not yet - kill my enemys
I have been beaten too much.?

[Chrous]
I cant move on
i cant give in
this is only what i want
i cant push on
this going on and on
i cant move back
my mind has fallen of its track
this is only what i fear
this time drags on - i need some time to heal

i cant beleive that your crumbling me
difficulty - have problems with breathing
im dying cant you see
but under the light
im what im ment to be
now i go

I cant move on
i cant give in
this is only what i want
i cant push on
this going on and on
i cant move back
my mind has fallen of its track
this is only what i fear
this time drags on - i need some time to heal

And i
too much pain to replace the name
i just have to play the same old game
i want to go
i want to leave
no more tricks up my sleeve
its the end of the track
no more looking back

I cant move on
i cant give in
this is only what i want
i cant push on
this going on and on
i cant move back
my mind has fallen of its track
this is only what i fear
this time drags on - i need some time to heal

i cant move on
i cant give in
i cant push on
i cant move back

i was thinking of the title 'Stuck'

if u think about

i cant move on
i cant push on
i cant move back

its like being stuck

comment please

 

bump

 

You have great flow, but maybe a some better rhyming would help. I also think that a more definate meaning to the song will allow you to make up a better name! 3.5/5

 

thanks man

 

I agree with Odaton........Overall: Good!



As for that line you need what about:



I have been beaten too much.



Just a thought.