Through It all

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    Feenix

    Feenix Well I Do

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    I think the chorus here has a nice rhythm to it, but the overall effect is ruined by forced rhyming in the verses.


    Through it All

    Here I am again,
    Paper and my pen,
    Will it serve me well?
    Will I go to hell?
    Well, I don't know,
    But this show's old,
    And I’m cold from the rain,
    And the pain that I feel,
    Hearing your name,
    So surreal,

    Through it all,
    I just fall,
    Punching holes,
    Through the wall,
    Wish I knew,
    What to do,

    Through it all,
    Thoughts of you,
    In my head,
    What was said,
    Was just me,
    Out of mind,

    Trying to find,
    A way to make it easier,
    After all the grey skies,
    And way too many lies,
    Still can't look you in the eyes,
    So much negativity,
    Stifles my creativity,
    No solution for this pollution,
    No resolution leading to absolution,
    Why did it happen like this?
    Falling into the abyss


    Through it all,
    I just fall,
    Punching holes,
    Through the wall,
    Wish I knew,
    What to do,

    Through it all,
    Thoughts of you,
    In my head,
    What was said,
    Was just me,
    Out of mind,

    Yeah through it all,
    I just crawl,
    On the floor,
    Close the door,
    Don't want this,
    Anymore.
     
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    saunderitos

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    sorry feenix,but i must agree with that.this writings not like your usual genius.
     

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