This is a song I'd written almost two years ago that I felt was one of my more creative pieces, so I felt the need to repost it here so people could let me know what they thought about it. "This Punctuation-Related Injury Could've Been Prevented if I Had Writer's Block" 19 January 2006 She said that I'm ridiculous She said she meant it in a good way I guess it's true I'm trying to get this right 'Cause I'm ridiculous like that I try to search for the right things to say But I trip over the formatting And all the symbols pierce my skin Causing a punctuation-related injury The doctors said they didn't know what to do When I stumbled into the emergency room Dangling my participles And holding onto the right words They directed me down the hallway And I ended up in a Dr. Seuss book Filled with ridiculous rhymes That made me feel like I was on acid Maybe that's what she meant When she said I was ridiculous Maybe I'm a Dr. Seuss book Childish and cute And not a person someone would want The exclamation point At the end of her voice Stabbed me in the eye And I couldn't see for days This movie could be the way we live our lives If we really wanted to But we've got to take that first step And kill Mike Meyers for playing the Cat in the Hat And Shrek Though unreleated And pretend that the mystical Fantasy world that Dr. Seuss created is real life And that real life is just as happy She's always on my mind Which is more than I can say For the red fish and blue fish That are consulting with each other right now Trying to determine what to do with my Question mark-induced injury Because all I've done is ask questions And not even to the person They should be directed to I've held conversations with myself And those run-on sentences Can take a toll on one's sanity after a while She said that I'm ridiculous She said she meant it in a good way Maybe it's true Since I'm just trying to get this right 'Cause I'm ridiculous like that Yeah, 'cause I'm ridiculous like that
I loved the idea. A few parts seemed kind of odd (I didn't like the reference to Dr. Seuss or Mike Meyers, but that is just personal preference I think). I thought the concept was amazing though. I really liked the part with the exclamation point.
Thanks. I've got no idea what the Mike Meyers thing was all about. The Dr. Seuss reference was always intended for the piece, though. I think.
I really enjoyed this piece. It took some thought, which I like. I also really like the exclamation point thing, what an interesting mental image...Good job, hun.
This is a fantastic piece. These lines were great, and really enjoyable to read for me: The doctors said they didn't know what to do When I stumbled into the emergency room Dangling my participles And holding onto the right words They directed me down the hallway And I ended up in a Dr. Seuss book Filled with ridiculous rhymes That made me feel like I was on acid Maybe that's what she meant When she said I was ridiculous Maybe I'm a Dr. Seuss book Childish and cute And not a person someone would want The exclamation point At the end of her voice Stabbed me in the eye And I couldn't see for days The only thing I didn't understand was the stab at Mike Myers. Seemed funny, but strange. Wonderful work.
Yeah. Like I said, I don't understand that either. I guess I didn't like Mike Myers when I wrote this. Anyways, thanks for the comment.