This Life....

Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by Jamie, Jun 15, 2005.

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    Jamie

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    Verse:
    Meet me at the gates
    Where we first met
    Show me your cold hand
    And rest it on my cheek
    (I'm not the only who cares)
    Why dont you trust me like you should?

    Chorus:
    I can hear you screaming at me
    (Why can't you walk away)
    I can hear you screaming at me
    (Why can't you go away)

    Bridge:
    The candle burns tonight
    (As I look through these photographs)
    The sky burns tonight
    Fireflies fill your eyes
    (And I need you to tell me)
    If I'm worth all this hate

    Outro:
    Show me
    Why you
    Don't trust me anymore

    Verse
    Chorus
    Verse
    Chours
    Bridge
    Chorus
    Outro
     
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    Louis

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    Not bad. Keep up the good work.
     
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    Glue

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    Good Job. I like your work. :D
     
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    Jamie

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    Thanks for the comments. Much appreciated
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    Havn't heard to much of your work but from what i have i can tell your a great writer. This is another great piece of work and would make a great song. I think it could use one more verse but other than that i love it. Fantastic work. Keep it up.
     
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    Jamie

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    Cheers D_A_V_I_D. I am making it into a song, there will be a sample of the guitars up on my bands myspace account this weekend.
     
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    Dedicated

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    Nice to see a new piece from you! :D


    I like it alot although it may be a bit repetitive. I agree with the other David about maybe adding a different verse in there but other than that it's awesome! :D

    Oh, and hope you've found a band name now! :lol:
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    Agreed.
     
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    Jamie

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    Thanks alot people
     
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    Arhaz

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    great piece...i love the "verse"...
    especially the "cold hand" part...cold love, eh?
    great stanza there and a good piece of writing! ^_^
     

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