So, I'm trying to make a remix to this song, or a new song entirely and I'd like your opinions on these lyrics and what I should change. The Untitled Promise (It starts with one) And multiplies until they can taste the sun Like escaping form a danger that you can't outrun I just wish that some change would come (It's so unreal) And all the fee's will fall away from the minorities That they'll have the choice to believe what they choose to believe Without all the hardcore spiritual leaders telling them that their wrong And all the preachers and teachers of the kingdom fill their eyes (fill their eyes) All the racist and the hatred of states divided seal To become a nation of prosperity to make the founders dreams be real Instead of bending your will 'til it breaks you within To erase all the deceivers and conflicts of sin And in the countries twilight of the skylight that highlights all the problems real I see the wrongness of the long blindness as I write this and send it on a rocket path to the way I feel (way I feel) Hear the screaming in my pleading as it seeming you're torn apart like we're heartless, take a part this in the darkness but i know that I tried so hard and got so far But in the end it doesn't even matter I had to fall to lose it all But in the end it doesn't even matter Them, the more prejudice come and you're engaged in battle That you've already thought you've won Over a belief that's too different from another one Hell, like it's a war to have opinions that aren't all the same They're all pulling their hair out, wondering who's to blame As if the agnostic had just torched their home to flames I just can't stand this, give me a reason I demand it For all the judgementalism in today youth For all the labels and all the untold truths Are they so blinded from the twilight through skylights and the highlights on a hatred real? I see the brightness of the misguided as I write this Like missiles on a path to the way I feel Hear the screaming in my dreaming as it seeming you've torn me apart like your heartless, without a harness in the darkness calling for me to believe an untitled promise I tried so hard and got so far But in the end it doesn't even matter I had to fall to lose it all But in the end it doesn't even matter I've put my trust in you And you tell me that I should go For all this There's only one thing I want to know Why I tried so hard and got so far But in the end it doesn't even matter I had to fall to lose it all But in the end it doesn't even matter
Meaningful lyrics. As a remix concept though, like the ones you did of the whole MTM album, the lyrics don't fit the song. I understand as a remix there will be a new structure for the verses, choruses, etc. but in terms of syllables per line, it doesn't fit. EDIT: And shouldn't this go in either Writer's Cove or Non-Album?
pretty interesting. i need to play the song so i can actually try and picture how this goes a little better.