The Untitled (Parts 1+2)

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    kotrunks

    kotrunks Well-Known Member

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    Part The First

    Infinity is only life’s doorstep.

    An idea dies from replacement.
    But this one will live forever.
    My stand includes yours
    But with everyone else’s too.

    This is the torture we live.

    Begin with knowledge to weather the storm.
    Whether or not you will make it is your problem.
    The leaf on the tree drops the same as you,
    Yet the leaf cannot change to save itself.

    You not only feel pain.
    You feel happiness as well.

    Read carefully my instructions.
    They can be contradictory to your knowledge.
    They can go hand in hand.
    It is based on what you know.

    If you know nothing,
    You will pass.
    I am sorry for the starting blow,
    It is a defense.

    The walls you can pass through are not clearly shown.
    Boundaries surround me as well,
    Just not as unpredictable.
    Empty your thoughts as we step out.

    As for me that is my job.
    Could be,
    Would be,
    Should be,
    Is me.

    Turn right,
    Left is no longer wrong.
    Do you feel cold?
    Let me dry your tears.

    I am anxious to meet my creator.
    I am ready for tomorrow.

    Part The Second

    I feel lost and forgotten.
    Take me before I revert.
    I am losing energy.

    You took the challenge without me.
    I gave you a choice,
    You choose death.

    Why did you do this to me?

    You did it to yourself.
    You followed me here.
    You did not change.
    You dropped like the leaf.

    Let me guess,
    Infinity lead me astray.
    Or I passed incorrectly a test.

    You did.
    I did.
    We all do.
    It’s what makes us human.

    The fault is of the changed.
    Not only of the hurt.
    The pain can get to be more than expected.
    In which, the version given is always untrue.

    The knowledge given to you was once me,
    And how I played the game did affect you.
    Another instance was how the water was poured
    But that changed two key elements.

    Take another try.
    See if you stay alive without worry.
    It could be the solution over thought.
    Just bring no weapons for balance.



    :mellow: At least tell me I'm weird.
     
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    a life in ashes

    a life in ashes mercury summer

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    I think its cool,

    its not that wierd....well not that much lol
     
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    kotrunks

    kotrunks Well-Known Member

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    It's weirdly written.
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    True words. Not wierd.
     
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    ChooseYourPoison

    ChooseYourPoison nymphetamine

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    Gah, I love your style. Excellent metaphors. You could go somewhere, keep writing.
     
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    matttheskwirl14

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    nice job. keep it up
     
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    sickcycle

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    I like it, diferent and good, almost like a coffe house poet, just darker
     
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    Jon[athan]

    Jon[athan] Sincerly, written from my brothers blood machine.

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    i like it. especially "Part the second." lol kinda reminds of vermillion Pt. 1+2 from vol. 3 the subliminal verses.
     
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    kotrunks

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    That's cool, I kinda just got into SlipKnot.

    Edit//
    I have decided on a name: "How It Feels"
     

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