The Understatement of...

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    Friskey™

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    The Understatement Of The Year Where It States Two Girls Together Are "Becoming Good Friends"

    I'm only here on leave
    I'm only here to watch you see
    The pictures in the book
    With bloodshot eyes and candles
    The name is always golden to me
    Throws off the tip of your tongue
    And apparently you're becoming
    Already you are now.

    How long has it been since you
    Cast the first stone
    Licked the first tongue now
    And how the hell did I not know?
    That two would become one
    Today
    And it goes on and on and on and on.

    I saw your picture in the picture book
    Happiest is the word to me
    Not even with me in the back of the shot
    I believe
    That pictures say a thousand words
    But the words underneath
    Are a million words.

    Are you home now?
    Thinking of what might come next?
    I know you're not home
    Cause you're in the big lights baby.

    How long has it been since you
    Cast the first stone
    Licked the first tongue now
    And how the hell did I not know?
    That two would become one
    Today
    And it goes on and on and on and on.
     
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    Tom

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    preety good poem there, good imaging also a good title. keep up the good work man:thumbsup:
     
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    the_musicman

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    long title

    4/5 stars.

    pretty good poem.
     
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    Linja

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    Will's Title Syndrome, eh? I like.

    And I'm commanding you to go and comment on my new poem/song, please?
     
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    GrafiTTied

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    one things for sure, the title rocks!
     
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    a life in ashes

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    I like it. It was...different, but good nonetheless.
     
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    Janie Jones

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    It's sweet, simple, and direct...but somewhat wistful. Mmm, me like. Nice title.
     

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