Sitting in an old abandoned house That was once familiar to me But all the shit that goes on now Has messed my memory The times have become so chaotic This life full of change The life life that I had never chosen This world that seems so strange I find a photo on the floor But I can't recall the face But suddenly I remember This was once a happy place This was once a happy place Take me back a few years To a time of innocence Where fucked up leaders of the world Wern't causing disturbance This place it reminds me Of a better time So I sit here now remenising To pass the lonely time This house which now stands dead Used to be a home To who I can't remember But it was someone I used to know Someone who was brave Someone who was fair A person who was never afraid A person who never dispaired Then it all comes back to my head Suddenly I see That the once occupier of this house Was none other than me It was me Take me back a few years To a time of innocence Where fucked up leaders of the world Wern't causing disturbance This place it reminds me Of a better time So I sit here now remenising To pass the lonely time Away from the world Away from reality Away from the world Where no one can find me You don't need to feel sorry for me I don't need your simpothy All I want is whats rightfully mine I want the years back from my life This house has given me strength I am no loger afraid I will fight my just cause I will fight it to the grave Take me back a few years To a time of innocence Where fucked up leaders of the world Wern't causing disturbance This place it reminds me Of a better time But no use of doing nothing Cos now is my time to fight Fight for you The house NOTE: For those who may be wondering,the house is a metephor for forgotten memories and lost causes.The song is played in acoustic and I don't sing it .Please take the time to comment on what you think about these lyrics
Yer. it's nice, couple of lines i feel that could be better though but on the whole it looks like a pretty good song. Here are the lines i think you should fix. Don't like the doulbe repeated ine unless it is like a soft repeat in the song to give it a resonating feeling. Feels like that line in moking bird by eminem. Didn't flow with the rest of the song. you are practically restating what you said in the line before. And that's it. few lol. Keep up the good work.
In contrast, I like the double line, it adds emphasis. Nice stuff, flows fairly well, a few spots here and there but they've already been pointed out.