Sunken

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    Terry

    Terry Yeah, but I wish you were my shadow. LPA Super Member

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    i wrote this during my math class, & i thought how everyone ignores me, even my friends. & i just sat there, while everyone else was in their own little world. & me in mine. & i didnt really make a chorus. i sucked @ that. i didnt really care if i wrote it right or not during then. this is one of my first songs/poems ive wrote. enjoy!

    I sit here
    All alone
    Waiting for someone
    I'm still not sure
    About this
    About my life
    About everything there is in the world
    I'm no one
    A vessel in this thing that you call the 'universe'

    Many people
    Don't know me
    The real me
    On the inside
    I wear a mask
    To conceal who I really am
    To make me look like one of you
    To act like one of you
    To be one of you
    Just to fit in this world

    Now
    I try to pull off the mask
    I pull
    And strain
    I try to let myself out
    Stop being like someone else
    I try with all my might
    But I can't
    I cannot breathe
    I've sunken into the abyss
    I'm lost
    Lost into the nothingness that you call
    'Existence'
    I live
    But i have no true goals or dreams
    Nothing to live for

    Because
    Nothing
    No one
    Is out there for me

    I'm sunken
    Far too deep
    Trying to climb back up
    Trying to get myself back up

    I say to myself
    Get up!
    But I cannot
    For I
    Have transformed
    Into 'the common person'
    Where no one is different
    Where everything is the same.........

    I'm sunken
    I try to keep my grip
    I slip
    And I fall
    Now I'm far too deep
    Trying to get back up....
    I'M SUNKEN!!!
     
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    wow, that's not that bad at all. That's a very nice song. I like it. It describes me too. Keep it up, man! ^_^
     
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    Terry

    Terry Yeah, but I wish you were my shadow. LPA Super Member

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    wow. thanx! im kinda young, so i thought i would suck, so i just gave it a try.

    btw, im a girl. lol. but thanx 4 the compliment!
     
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    Will

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    What?! Do I not exist? :lol:
     
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    Terry

    Terry Yeah, but I wish you were my shadow. LPA Super Member

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    lol.
     
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    Jawknee

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    :eek: That had to be one of the best submissions of writing material I've ever come across here at LPA. Thank you so much for sharing that. Oh, and thank you for your comment. :blush:
     
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    Part.Of.Me

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    Awsome! Is that the first time you've ever wrote lyrics or anything like that? You have to write more, seriously!
     
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    Terry

    Terry Yeah, but I wish you were my shadow. LPA Super Member

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    yea it is kinda my first time. ive just been kinda saying them in my head & then i finally wrote 'em down. i have more stuff comin, if anyone wants 2 read. & neo, i only said that because you're really good @ that stuff.

    hey you guys say that my lyrics are good. guess how old i am??
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    11. lol.
     
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    Part.Of.Me

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    It doesn't matter how old you are.. I don't think anyone here cares too much..

    Are you planning on writing anymore any time soon?
     
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    Terry

    Terry Yeah, but I wish you were my shadow. LPA Super Member

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    you really wanna hear some more?
     
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    Jawknee

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    11?! :eek: Your writing sucks, forget it.





















    :teehee: I kid.
     
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    Terry

    Terry Yeah, but I wish you were my shadow. LPA Super Member

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    lol. yes im 11. but im angry a lot, so it helps my writing.









    hey, im almost 12!! lol.
     
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    Part.Of.Me

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    Hell yes.. Get your ass into gear and write us some more! ^_^
     
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    Terry

    Terry Yeah, but I wish you were my shadow. LPA Super Member

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    ok, ok. i got some stuff started anyway......................ill get back 2 you in................god knows how much time.........................DONT PUT SO MUCH PRESSURE ON ME!!!!!




    sorry. i was a lil pissed.


    ill bring some more stuff back in a week or so.

    lol.
     
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    Crazy.Desperate.Insane

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    It's good.. Lol.. writing a poem in math class and not listening to the teacher.. I also write stuff not in class but during seminars.. I am afraid to not listen to the teacher.. I don't know what's with our class room or with them but we always get noticed whenever we're doing somthing else.. If I'm really sleepy, I just pretend to listen.. but I avoid doing that because i am afraid to not understand the lesson..
     
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    Omar

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    you should turn that into a full song, it would definetly sound even better :D
     
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    Terry

    Terry Yeah, but I wish you were my shadow. LPA Super Member

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    yea, i would, but i dont know how. can someone help?
     

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