Still Breathing

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    arT saveS

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    Am I still breathing
    Or is this a dream deceiving
    Everything I ever needed
    Is bleeding
    Screaming
    Free me

    Sorrowful moan
    Under the moonlight
    Scrutinizing howl
    No love is found

    I’m still breathing
    Another thought of death
    Fucking life has no feelings
    Keeping me safe,
    When I wish to be bleeding

    Bring me the angels
    Bring me the demons
    Cut the throat
    Of anything living

    Bring me god
    Bring me Satan
    Throw them into the abyss
    And take control

    Bring me water
    Bring me fire
    Curse this creation
    Of your foul lord

    Don’t remind me,
    I’m still breathing
    Wait for it
    The day of my dying

    Still breathing...
     
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    fallenangel

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    :eek: me almost speechless!

    this is really good, with great use of imagery. it is very dark and there is a great feeling of sorrow in this poem. love it... keep it up the writting cause if you can write like this then you are a true poet.
     
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    This is awsome, I like it.
     
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    arT saveS

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    Thank you much. :)
     
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    Evil Angel

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    excellent.No words for praise
     
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    Muri

    Muri It never ends.

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    ^_^ Really good. I likey!
     
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    arT saveS

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    Thank you.
     
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    Il inno di morte

    Il inno di morte A noi si schiude il ciel...

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    Good job! this is kinda sad and dark, but i liked the way you expressed this human emotions. i really liked it and i hope to read more of your stuff. keep it up!!!
     
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    arT saveS

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    Thank you for the comments. :)
     
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    Linja

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    wow, I love this. It's really heartfelt, and emotional. I think this is a great piece, keep it up. :D
     
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    arT saveS

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    Thank you. :)
     

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