Please read this poem with an open mind. It's a very new thing for me. Also please comment on what you think of it. Sounds of Love Beat thumb beat Like a second heart you are to me Tick tock tick More precious than infinity you are to me Smak hiss smak A kiss on your tender lips A feeling of mutual bliss Bang bang bang An explosion of love Murmer murmer shhh A secect sent from above Ding ping dong The chimes that echo your smile Swiggle swaggle tap The sound of bodies entwined But there is no sound for us For the intensity of you plus me Just a silent breeze That echos our love for eternity
Why nobody has commented on this yet, is beyond me. The only thing that seemed a little awkward to me, was the fact you tried writing different 'sounds'...maybe it's just me Other than that: I like it a lot. I personally feel it's about two lover's having sex for the first time together...falling madly in love with each other over and over again. Even if that's not what you were aiming for, it's always good to have something open for interpretation. 9/10
Thanks so much for your appreciation of the poem Mr.Nobody!! It means a lot to me, a lot than people might think.