Sometimes

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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    SOMETIMES.


    Sometimes I wish I would just fade away like the stars in the morning light,
    Sometimes I wish the clock would just hold back like the coward knight,
    Sometimes it’s like you weren’t there for me ever, like right now…
    Sometimes has to be this moment, this place …just somehow…

    Sometimes I wish to lose my mind in the mist of your complaints,
    Sometimes it’s like what I ever wanted or what I ever needed just faints.
    Sometimes I was reborn to crush the feeling with the distinct pain,
    Sometimes I get lost and fail myself to my unworthy remains.

    Sometimes I seemed so far away from all the noise and all the blame,
    Sometimes, like now, I just want to go back to then, than going insane.
    Sometimes the rain drenched me from my wounds and everlasting fear,
    Sometimes I’m in this shadowed cold corner letting out a helpless tear.

    Sometimes I hear Death answering my silent shivered cries,
    Sometimes it just ignores me, or it tries to calm me with replies.
    Sometimes even it backs out hoping to let me live a miserable while longer,
    Sometimes I think it may be ok, for the fact that I’ll grow stronger.

    Sometimes these moments just tend to turn around and bite my flesh,
    Sometimes they end up asking me why I give meaning to words and don’t suppress.
    Sometimes I wonder if I was ever allowed to actually die and be born once more,
    I know that time I would clean out my miseries and clean out my core.
     
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    Luke

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    Thats pretty good!
     
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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    thank you!
     
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    sickcycle

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    i like the setup, reminds me in some parts like my own, "The Black Rose" as far as subject is conserned. Is good, some words i would consider changing, maybe make it more descriptive.
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    Good job.It's really nice.
     
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    Jon[athan]

    Jon[athan] Sincerly, written from my brothers blood machine.

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    thats pretty good. if that were like a real song with music and all i think it would sound awesome if they screamed the "sometimes" and sang everything after it.
     
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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    ot would really be neat...

    thank you all very much...the next time i write something i shall keep in mind :more description and try making some song of it...thanks!
     

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