Something I Dragged Out The Archives

Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by No Ace Just You, Feb 17, 2008.

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    No Ace Just You

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    What A New Low

    When I found her there, that fateful august morning,
    Her eyes were bloodshot, clearly still in mourning,
    But as she lay there, her fists clenched in the sand,
    I can still swear I heard angels.

    After coffee's and cigarettes, I guess I saw more colour,
    In those cheeks, and her smile returned so pure,
    100 steps and her eyes spoke more than words,
    Moments stretched to years, and she was a memory again.

    As she walked, away...

    In her good shoes, I can still see her go,
    That thud in my ears, must've been my heart,
    Trying to escape and chase her down,
    What a new low...


    Knowing you...

    Every time we walk down this street, together,
    I still feel alone, even though you're there right next to me,
    Eventually, I hope we'll find another road,
    I hope you grab my hand so I can feel you once again.

    In her good shoes, I can still see her go,
    That thud in my ears, must've been my heart,
    Trying to escape and chase her down,
    What a new low...


    Knowing you...

    Now break your last promises up,
    Feed your bread to the others, if they're good enough for you.


    All criticism welcome, though it is a bit quiet in the Writer's Cove lately :mellow:
     
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    The Emptiness Machine

    The Emptiness Machine Out of the abyss. LPA Über VIP

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    Pretty good! But When I found her there, that fateful august morning,
    Her eyes we bloodshot, clearly still in mourning,
    I think you meant Her eyes were blood shot, not we
     
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    No Ace Just You

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    Yeah I did mean that, thanks

    Thanks for the kind words too
     

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