I don't really know what this is. Again xD it's some random stuff I just wrote down at work xD the last sentence is a bit meh. But I'm not sure what to change it to yet.. From ashes he shall rise Through fires he shall walk Blood he shall spill Wherever he will go, destruction shall follow He will be the fear of all men He will be the tale you tell to scare your children He will be the horror of the world In the silent night you will hear his cries But when the new age dawns, so shall peace! So.. I added and changed some stuff.. x) From ashes he shall rise Through fires he shall walk Blood he shall spill Wherever he will go, destruction shall follow He will be the fear of all men He will be the tale you tell to frighten your children He will be the horror of the world He will be what you dread the most His cries you shall hear, in the dead of the silent night The cries of terror The cries of suffering The cries of ruin They shall be heard all over the lands They shall be the remembrance of fate Of the prophecy Of His Doom! But, even then, in the darkness In the shadows of evil The new age shall dawn And so shall peace
This is awesome! The last sentence feels off, yeah. Maybe you could keep it, but write another stanza or two in between? Because it feels like a good final line.