Solitude

Hey, guys!

I thought I'd write something even though I don't know what it is. I've never wrote down anythjing like that before and it took like 2 minutes (and I'm sure it shows, lol !!)


Solitude

I wake up each morning with a feeling
Maybe this time it'll be happening
Somebody will look at me
And maybe they'll see
The pain that is in me

Empty I was born
In loneliness I live
And in pain I'll die

Solitude has sworn
To stay with me
No matter what I do
I can't get out of it.

-----The End---------

I know, I know it really sucks. I don't even know why I wrote this non-sense stuff...

Jamie

 

that's cool a lot of my stuff is written in 2 minutes...it's freeverse so i don't really take time to put too much thought in it (especially if ideas come to me easily) but i really like it! it shows emotion.

 

Thanks!

So you don't it's total non sense? Does it make any sense at all?

 

I doesn't suck. Just write more and you'll get better at it. It doesn't rhymes (like most poems) but it gots a great meaning...

 

although most poems do rhyme, they don't have to! and i've come across a lot more that don't rhyme than do in school. and the ones that DO rhyme, they're very subtle and you're supposed to read it through to the next line...very confusing!

 

that's realy good but it sounds like 2pac - changes

 

It's cool!

 

Well, it's nice to know that some of you like it ....
How can it sound like 2pac Changes? I don't see the connection, I don't even remember the lyrics to Changes... if it does seems like it's from 2pac, then it means that I really have no inspiration. Anyways, I know my writing sucks, I have no talent whatsoever so why did I think I could actually be good at writing down my emotions. If I were to be corrected by a teacher, I'll get like a F ...

I really suck and not just in writing, I have no quality at all, I'm sorry to bother you with my probs...;