Shroud of Time The smoke clears the air and all that’s left is death Bodies strewn about on an open plain, your evil personified The Reaper comes to collect, and waits till your very last breath So young, with all innocence lost when face to face with the sword To hear the battle cry, to see men’s faces scream with hearts trembling inside Born as wretches you are, tainted with sin and overcome with greed This land once a beautiful paradise, raped and pillaged by you all A gift given with the greatest love, destroyed with your hate And so the demons watch you, laughing as you all fall Her image grows in the distance through the dust she penetrates my vision Skin parched and dry like desert, her young faced aged by the Son Her smile hath run away, the only emotion she shows is her apprehension She is embodies your will, she knows me better than any scholars rhyme I have danced in the fires of great worriers and by the sides of ancient myths I have seen them fall to the sword and arrow, and been cast behind a shroud of time You seek within to find me; there I have lain dormant inside of you all along You ask me to bestow strength upon you this day, for you fight for your King Courage be my name, survived I have in you through ages past, and glorified in song The good that is left in men, embrace me to become the courageous, the proud, the strong
Your work is just astounding. Might I ask how old you are? "Her image grows in the distance through the dust she penetrates my vision Skin parched and dry like desert, her young faced aged by the Son Her smile hath run away, the only emotion she shows is her apprehension" Those lines are just amazing. I think you mean "Sun" though instead of son? or is that just something I'm not comprehending. Anyway..have you ever thought about joining DeviantART? If you haven't..or you are already..I have a feeling your poems would take over my favorites gallery
I am 16 years old, and Deviant ART cost money to join right? Anyway I did mean Son, as in The Son of God, I say in the poem that the lady is a symbolic being that represents humanity, once beautiful, but through sin became ugly, and at the time of "The Fall", when Adam sinned, God took out his wrath on her and turned her into what we see in the poem. I love mixing Greek mythology, Christianity, and other religions and fables that give good symbolism, makes writing more fun. I am a Christian, so it’s easy to incorporate it into writing, others I study via internet before I begin a poem. Thanks for the comments!
i love it so much i'm gonna bump it above my song. Great work. I know you ask for help in the end, so that shows you're trying to overcome the evil, which is great too.
that is an amazing piece of work. i really like it keep writing like that and you could go somewheres.