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    Trish

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    She was the girl who never smiled
    She was the girl who hid
    She was the girl who always cried
    She failed in all she did

    She was the girl who never talked
    She was the girl in the dark
    She was the girl that no one loved
    The girl without a spark

    She was the girl who always felt cold
    She was the girl with no life
    She was the girl who sat alone
    And cut herself with a knife

    She was the girl with an ugly face
    Black smudges were there from crying
    She was the girl with a heart of darkness
    She was the girl who was dying

    She was the girl who was a failure
    A girl who could never ‘be’
    She was the girl who hated herself
    This was the girl that is me

    Comments are appreciated.
     
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    linktolinkinpark

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    That is very deep, and personal, but I'm glad it seemed as though you put alot of effort into it, which you probably did! I love it! 8/10
     
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    Trish

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    ^_^
    Thankyou very much
    :)
     
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    HARLEYsheXda

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    umm, easy with that one! :wth:

    overall, it's really a good poem. will be excellent if u could just polish the words variety a 'lil bit... well, sometimes i also have the difficulties in creating one of my own...

    i'm looking forward for ur next post. ;)
     
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    linkinparkbby101

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    thats really good really deep. its really sad too. keep up the good work ;)
     
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    kenji-san

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    Hey, I love that poem!! Keep up the writing!! :D To tell you the truth, that girl sounds a bit like me :eek: :unsure: I better get going now! Peace out!! :mike:
     
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    personal and well written.. :)
     
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    Omar A

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    Thats so ####### awesome. Especially how you saw "This was the girl that is me" in the end.

    Good Job, 10/10
     

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