Secrets

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    forfeit3

    forfeit3 Well-Known Member

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    this is a rap i made, any comments or oppinions are will be greatly appreciated. thanks.


    Secrets

    Thoughts that grow in ones mind,
    Can often be undefined,
    A threat to feelings left behind,

    And the thoughts usually change the trust,
    Between two good friends,
    Can bring things to an end with a bust.

    And that’s when secrets are born,
    Opinions are said,
    And views are torn,

    Stuff not ever meant to be said,
    But it is anyways,
    Because someone can’t keep the thoughts in their head.

    Ideas spinning inside your paranoid brain,
    Of what will happen,
    If the thoughts are let out, you won’t become insane,

    Leaked out to somebody not meant to hear
    The personal secrets
    By the person who has no fear.

    But it doesn’t even matter
    If you spill a secret,
    Your self credibility is shattered.

    I say these things from experience,
    Things that aren’t at all delirious
    Things that hurt people inside,
    And im sorry if I ever lied.

    So remember my friends,
    When the day comes to an end,

    Secrets aren’t always for you,
    So don’t screw with secrets,
    Or you’ll get messed up to.
     
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    Heavy is the Louis

    Heavy is the Louis No really, we are so back. LPA Team

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    That last line killed it.

    But it was good. Keep up the good work.
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    Yer, it was pretty good, i think you could become great if you wrote more, keep writting.
     
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    forfeit3

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    thanks for the comments guys
     
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    bleeding rose

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    I really liked it ...waiting for your next one *thumbs up* ;)
     
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    forfeit3

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    thanks!
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    true.
     

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