forgive the title but i can never think of one that fits the poems! anyway, here goes... why do you get so mad when i speak to another you don't love me so why do you bother? you don't need me here in your life but i think that you like all the fights why else would you go on an on at me god leave me alone just leave me please! stop looking at me that way cause you give me that chill but i guess you must like it cause it gives you a thrill my blood runs cold and my heart turns to stone every time now that you enter the room
Nice, the flow was good, and the no rhyming was really good . I felt the lines where a little short. i like to at least see 4 words per line but this is just personal preferance. Good meaning and an all round good poem. UMM for the title. lets see. How you turned my heart to stone. a bit long but oh well ps what do u think of my new aviator
i think u meant avatar.. lol i like it!! this one is really nice [/b][/quote] same thing :whistle: i cant spell, get over it lol
avatar very cool! again this just tumbled out and i just kind of go with it. but with practice my lines should get longer. i guess i am still finding my flow
yeah, you are absolutely right. I can feel the talent inside you. please never give up, cuz you may make lots of people feel identified with your lines. keep going! by the way, david, your avatar rocks!!!
well i guess this is not as good as your previous poems(nobody can be consitent all the time),but believe me you are extrmely talented who can write what your feelings are,so I look forward to more of your stuff.