Remembered

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    LornVourkolakas

    LornVourkolakas About To Blow Chunks

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    Again, it's happened
    The sun, it has setted
    Leaving shadows upon hope
    Leaving nothing to me

    The sun is gone
    The darkness enters
    Hope has left me
    God has died
    Nothing left
    Nothing here
    In this world of nothingness

    Stuck in a corner
    Tears, they fall to ground
    No light here to shine
    I don't know what to do

    I'm all alone
    I'm so afraid
    I can't go on
    It still lingers
    The rain, it falls
    The hurt, it stays
    The water turns red

    I still remember all the things that were said and done
    Nothing seems to be able to make it all fade
    Life seems to be getting harder to live
    Death creaks the door
    Life is walking out

    There's a humming that can be heard
    Feel the vibrations from it
    The sky seems to close in
    Watch the clouds come apart

    The wind blows against the trees
    The trees start to shake the ground
    I lose my balance and now I'm left with nothing at all

    I still remember all the things that were said and done
    Nothing seems to be able to make it all fade
    Life seems to be getting harder to live
    Death creaks the door
    Life is walking out

    Tears are falling
    Fear is rising
    Crimson on the floor
    Death shuts the door
     
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    ass_kicker

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    i love these 2 parts. good job. watching the clouds come apart... its so... whats the word... never mind i dont remember. poetic? no not really. deep. yeah. thats it. its so deepful and meaningful ^_^ good work.
     
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    HARLEYsheXda

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    only this part make sense to me... i'm not the greatest critic over here but if u could tighten the lyric a bit i think it'll be a hit... ;)
     
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    ass_kicker

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    the way i interprate it... is how the person speaking doesnt seem to have a point in living... and how many #### things happened and the person's left with nothing but they cant hold on anymore. thats just me though. its really good.
     
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    LornVourkolakas

    LornVourkolakas About To Blow Chunks

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    I can't really explain what this song means. I mean, writing the song was the only way to express the feelings I had. If I could put it in a way that could be broken down to simplier words, I wouldn't be writing poetry or songs. So I can't help anyone to understand the meaning of the song. You would have to be in my exact position in order to and I doubt anyone here has lived my life.

    Thank you, ass_kicker. I'm glad you liked it.

    Thanks for the advice, HARLEYsheXda. But I won't be changing the song. I like it the way it is. :) But thank you anyways.
     
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    HARLEYsheXda

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    maybe with some fine tunes would put the song to justice... anyway, u should like what u wrote... and i'm glad u like it... :)

    (usually songwriters would tightened the song before they record it... well, mostly... - amateur critic :D )
     
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    LornVourkolakas

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    maybe with some fine tunes would put the song to justice... anyway, u should like what u wrote... and i'm glad u like it... :)

    (usually songwriters would tightened the song before they record it... well, mostly... - amateur critic :D ) [/b][/quote]
    I'm not a artist, though. So, nah nah nah boo boo... :lol:
     

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