Red Anger

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    Amanda

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    Red Anger


    the jar I keep hidden in the back of my room,
    everything I store inside it: hope, fear and gloom,
    but the jar is filled mostly by one emotion I haven't said,
    I feel it very often, and I know it as red,
    they tell me it's a problem that needs to be resolved,
    but they aren't me so why are they involved?
    when I'm taunted and teased I feel it deep inside,
    it's almost always mixed with sadness and a bit of broken pride,
    red tends so make you be irrational and put up your guard,
    I know the feeling well and controlling it is hard,
    one thing about red is that it falls straight from your heart,
    and the red will always puddle in the bottom of the jar
     
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    esaul17

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    Pretty good. I liked the part where you talk about anger falling from your heart like blood.
     
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    sickcycle

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    very well done indeed.
     
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    Well done.
     
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    Nice. I like it alot.
     
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    Il inno di morte

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    ;) i agree. Great work, man! :D
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    ;) i agree. Great work, man! :D [/b][/quote]
    i double agree.

    Awsome poem
     
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    arT saveS

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    Not too bad at all.
     
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    LornVourkolakas

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    I like it but I think you should read it over. There are some parts I think you should fix. (grammar-wise)
     
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    [Th3 Wkng De@d]

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    Excellent. Keep up the good work.
     
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    the_musicman

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    very good. 4/5
     

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