R.A.P (first verse)

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    saunderitos

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    R.A.P(Retards attempting poetry)

    Is this of relevance, But I’m malevolent writin’ rhymes Of all kinds but I am decadent
    My mind is on fire, but I’m no liar, turn your back on me and I’ll ride ya
    50 cent, should go repent, commitin’ sins with his pen and to him that was lent
    Shot 9 times don’t mean you’ whack Just that everybody thinks you’re a twat







    this is my first verse of my trash talk rap
    i hope you like it
     
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    heshboy

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    I like it because you were talking trash on 50. Please finish of this rap by talking crap on the rest of G-Unit. I hate them. B)
     
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    saunderitos

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    Wilko heshboy,wilko
     
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    i don't really like those raps.. sorry..

    i just like your other ones better ;)
     
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    can you explain why you put 'those'

    i havn't posted a great deal :p

    too bad you didn't like it ^^
     
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    It's pretty good for a trash talk rap, i just don't have much respect for trash talk rap.
     
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    Trash talk rap is great, especially against G-Unit. They are just dumb, their clothes are dumb, and everything about them is dumb. B)
     
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    I really hope this rap isn't your final draft
    'Cuz the rhyming is off and your humor really daft
    I'm sorry; whack don't rhyme with twat
    So I guess you're not as good at R.A.P as you thought
    This rap contains no relevance; it just shows you ignorant
    Especially when you tried so hard to diss 50 Cent
    Hate to tell you that with this you won't get far
    Unless you can compare to Game's 300 bars
    This rap is trashy talk, but I don't have to say it
    You typed as much and that's like signing an affidavit
    R.A.P. should R.I.P and THAT you'll mourn
    Because what R.A.P. means is gonna get you warned.

    :lol: That was fun.
     
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    :eek: saunderitos you better make a come back, because this guy just dissed not only your rap. He made fun of it, and you. This is a slap in the face and I expect you to come back at him hitting hard.
     
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    this thread could be an online rap stage contest...you know those sub urban rap wars?...
    "Step up to the microphone...who can rock a rhyme like this, bring it to you every time like this...step step up step step up step up...."
    :lol:
     
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    I was thinking the same thing. B)
     
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    I really hope this rap isn't your final draft
    'Cuz the rhyming is off and your humor really daft
    I'm sorry; whack don't rhyme with twat
    So I guess you're not as good at R.A.P as you thought
    This rap contains no relevance; it just shows you ignorant
    Especially when you tried so hard to diss 50 Cent
    Hate to tell you that with this you won't get far
    Unless you can compare to Game's 300 bars
    This rap is trashy talk, but I don't have to say it
    You typed as much and that's like signing an affidavit
    R.A.P. should R.I.P and THAT you'll mourn
    Because what R.A.P. means is gonna get you warned.

    :lol: That was fun. [/b][/quote]
    i didnt know you were rapping when i first read it *smack numnut*
    anyway, i've never battled before.heregoes


    Final? nah, its the beggining,but when i'm finished I'm the one be grinnin'
    Whack and twat ryhme where i come from
    At that place,where I'm someone
    You lack rythm(typo?)and ryhme and flow
    I say that I don't,but it's something I know
    You wanna battle,come here and you bring it
    Like shit in a bag,ill pick it and fling it




    that's all i got for the moment
     
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    AHAHA ill keep score....1 point saunderitos, 0 Minus Xero

    Im sorry but that reply kicks the shit out of Minus Xero's one.....

    You wanna battle,come here and you bring it
    Like shit in a bag,ill pick it and fling it


    Thats da shit man!!! (literally)

    :D
     
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    I was actually just being stupid BUUUT...

    I also think everyone should vote at the END of the battle to make life a lot easier.

    I can't believe I'm hearing all of this shit
    It sounds like you're stuck in a Will Smith hit
    Gettin' jiggy wit' it, this ain't your style
    Cuz I'm bring what you want like Girls Gone Wild
    You're really mild, I don't think you're gettin' it
    Right now I'm on my second pop reference
    That you didn't get, boy you're too young
    Like a baby in a diaper trying to hold a gun
    You're immature, grow up, or it's the slammer
    But maybe there you'll learn about spelling and grammar
    So you can steadily test me but you'll never best me
    Hit you in the heart until you get an epilepsy
    Take your shit in a bag and pick it and fling it
    But I'm a loaded god complex, cock it and pull it.

    References for the unknowing/curious:

    Will Smith - Gettin' Jiggy Wit' It
    Girls Gone Wild
    Fallout Boy - Sugar, We're Going Down

    EDIT: Oh, and also, just out of my grammar nazi attitude ( :lol: ), it's rhythm and rhyme. Those are the correct ways to spell those words.
     
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    I was actually just being stupid BUUUT...

    I also think everyone should vote at the END of the battle to make life a lot easier.

    I can't believe I'm hearing all of this shit
    It sounds like you're stuck in a Will Smith hit
    Gettin' jiggy wit' it, this ain't your style
    Cuz I'm bring what you want like Girls Gone Wild
    You're really mild, I don't think you're gettin' it
    Right now I'm on my second pop reference
    That you didn't get, boy you're too young
    Like a baby in a diaper trying to hold a gun
    You're immature, grow up, or it's the slammer
    But maybe there you'll learn about spelling and grammar
    So you can steadily test me but you'll never best me
    Hit you in the heart until you get an epilepsy
    Take your shit in a bag and pick it and fling it
    But I'm a loaded god complex, cock it and pull it.

    References for the unknowing/curious:

    Will Smith - Gettin' Jiggy Wit' It
    Girls Gone Wild
    Fallout Boy - Sugar, We're Going Down

    EDIT: Oh, and also, just out of my grammar nazi attitude ( :lol: ), it's rhythm and rhyme. Those are the correct ways to spell those words. [/b][/quote]
    Your last reply you know it had me in shock
    Cock it and pull it,you play with what?
    You try and write well ,but you can't make it
    then you insult me,so you can try and fake it
    I write it good,so I write it short
    Your rhymes belong in a gay tennis court
    You still sure you wanna carry on?
    Tick tock tick tock lyrical rhyme bomb



    :D

    thanks ether by the way
     
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    Ether

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    short and once again kick arse.....Minus Xero you better pull out something good shit or....this battle is won....

    not to say that Minus Xero's isnt good, its just being shotgunned on this such day ^_^
     
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    thanks ether :D
    :bounce:
     
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    heshboy

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    This is a R.A.P battle?
    Bitches I travel all around the world gathering cattle together
    Abra Kadvara I arrived here in the writer cove, back touring the globe, coming to taking back my area code
    (YaNa)Listen up you're rymes are dry, and causing babies to cry, so ante up the flow
    Kids I told you, Yana is back on the corner, and taking back the block, putting everyone in shock
    But you know why you're raps are short, Its only so you wont get hurt
    But you have already been burnt, I am representing the O.C kid dont front
    I know you just want to taugnt, but you cant see me
    If yo find me, I'll be sure to make bleed, and bow down on your knees
    I am running laps around you so breezy, this shit is seems so easy
    So Don't take this R.A.P too personally, though it hurts
    I am not here to seem like a jerk
     
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    hey heshboy you wann battle with me aswell?if so. bring it on!
     
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    Seeing as I don't rap for a living...

    or rather, rap in general, I'm going to bow out.

    I was just trying to be funny there so yeah.
     

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