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    Theazninvasion68

    Theazninvasion68 It's like blood to a vampire, our tragic desire. LPA Super VIP

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    i accidenaly posted the poem in artist's gallery
    admins delete that one and save this one to talk about

    here goes


    Mommy

    Johnny brought a gun to school,
    He told his friends that it was cool,
    And when he pulled the trigger back,
    It shot with a great crack.
    Mommy, I was a good girl, I did
    What I was told,
    I went to school, I got straight As',
    I even got the gold!
    But Mommy, when I went to school that day,
    I never said goodbye,
    I'm sorry Mommy, I had to go,
    But Mommy, please don't cry.
    When Johnny shot the gun,
    He hit me and another,
    And all because Johnny,
    Got the gun from his older brother.
    Mommy, please tell Daddy;
    That I love him very much,
    And please tell Chris; my boyfriend ;
    That it wasn't just a crush.
    And tell my little sister;
    That she is the only now,
    And tell my dear sweet Grandmother;
    I'll be waiting for her now,
    And tell my wonderful friends;
    That they always were the best,
    Mommy, I'm not the first,
    I'm no better then the rest.
    Mommy, tell my teachers;
    I won't show up for class,
    And never to forget this,
    And please don't let this pass.
    Mommy, why'd it have to be me?
    No one deserves this,
    Mommy, warn the others,
    Mommy, I left without a kiss.
    And Mommy, tell the doctors;
    I know they really did try,
    I think I even saw a doctor,
    Trying not to cry.
    Mommy, I'm slowly dying,
    With a bullet in my chest,
    But Mommy, please remember,
    I'm in heaven with the rest.
    Mommy, I ran as fast as I could,
    When I heard that crack,
    Mommy, listen to me if you would,
    I'm not coming back.
    I wanted to go to college,
    I wanted to try things that were new,
    I guess I'm not going with Daddy;
    On that trip to the new zoo.
    I wanted to get married,
    I wanted to have a kid,
    I wanted to be an actress,
    Mommy, I wanted to live.
    But Mommy, I'm must go now,
    The time is getting late,
    Mommy tell my boyfriend ,
    I'm sorry, but I had to cancel the date.
    I love you Mommy, I always have,
    I know; you know it's true,
    And Mommy all I wanted to say is,
    "Mommy, I love you

    :'( :'( :'( :'( :'( :'( :'( :'(
     
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    Burningsoul

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    :'( :'( :'( i almost cried at this, and so did siome of my m8s.
     
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    bex_luvin_ian

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    hiya yeah im wit BURNING SOUL he shud me at skol its really touching
     
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    Theazninvasion68

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    i kno this poem almost made me cry
    really sad.
    if that happen to someone?
    or if i were the mother
    id fell really sad and most likey rerember it forever.

    now, theres a lesson.
    post them here.


    i show this to other students and they r depressed by the poem
    the origal one is at my house and at counter-hack.net(i forgot the entire link to it)
     
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    Burningsoul

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    I know what ya mean, if anythin similar happened 2 me, id b scarred 4 life, adn remember this poem, cheerz 4 d link aswell
     
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    Theazninvasion68

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    i love this poem
    it always calms me down.
    anyone knwo the lesson?
    i do
    im not gonna spoil it
     
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    Burningsoul

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    Is the lesson treat everyday has though it is your last, cus thats what this poem says to me, if you have anythin to say to people, say it because you dont know what will happen later
     
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    Theazninvasion68

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    heres a link to the site
    no spam.
    the same poem is here
    if u want
    u can read there replys
    (there are some stupid people in the fourms that ive joined.)
     
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    Mark

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    this is the second time you've posted this where I've had to remove the link. you're warned.
     
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    Soulcrasher-X

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    Really good and sad poem :mellow:
     
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    Theazninvasion68

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    agreed
     
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    :(
     
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    Theazninvasion68

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    the sadeset poem ive ever read even still today...
     
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    Sad :(
     
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    sickcycle

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    i think you mean, "Only one now"

    Nice poem, some rhymes seemed forced but it hardly took away from the saddness of it! Really something, more original than others, and i like the way you wrote it, its long but the way you put the words made you read fast, and the content you put in the words made you keep reading.
     
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    Theazninvasion68

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    i know this poem took an estimated 3 weeks to complete(school project too ^_^ )
    anyone think this is sad?
     

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