Peoms by Me

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    Michael

    Michael Well-Known Member

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    a poem by me. called Love:
    Your eyes are like the moon reflecting the light from the sun

    They will never fade or die even if the world became dark for an eternity

    Ever existed this fate and it shall not be destroyed

    Upon this earth there is a person for everyone, two made for each other

    Whatever happens we will never split for the forces of love and fate has bound us

    It is luck that will bring us together

    To our ever existing fate as long as we live


    and another called Life, One step at a time:
    I walk in to a room
    I see happy faces
    Happy people, laughing and joking
    Having a good time
    I look back at me, and think
    I wish I were like them
    For me life is like a sad story
    I am alone, I feel upset
    I am not one of them
    I do not fit in anywhere
    Not a single person cares how I feel
    Social situations are torture for me,
    I can’t read peoples emotions
    People are like a textbook
    Hard to understand
    Hard to learn about
    I live in my own world
    Just me, nobody but me
    I work for me and get good grades for me
    I live life one step at a time
     
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    corrupted_authority

    corrupted_authority Banned

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    man those are kool poems . well done .... u can tell the lp in them .... keeep it up u might wanna try to make them in2 songs
     
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    EvilMonyaki

    EvilMonyaki Extremely H! Vltg3

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    cool!!
     
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    Nikki

    Nikki I have no idea what is going on LPA Super Member

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    Dude. I love them (bloody hell....Kat reveiwing a poem?! This never happens!)

    Seriously, they are very very true - easy to relate to and very easy to understand. Language is good, layout is even better...and the best thing about it...it doesn't use rhyming couplets (I see so much of that everyday and it really annoys me >_>')

    Anyway. I salute you mate. Nice work :)

    Keep them as poems...not songs >_<
     
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    Michael

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    thanks for the reviews I am gonna post more soon. :D
     

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