out of your head

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    fallenangel

    fallenangel Well-Known Member

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    you sit beside me and i start to shudder
    you ask me that question but to me it's like thunder
    why do you ask me, over and over
    you know the answer, so why do you torture

    i don't love you no more
    i wish you would leave me alone
    get me out of your head
    so you can at least move on

    honesty can be brutal
    but i don't give a shit
    i want to say what i like
    so you will just have to live with it


    what ya think?
     
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    Il inno di morte

    Il inno di morte A noi si schiude il ciel...

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    hey, pretty cool. seems like this person really did something to make you mad :p .
    Good work, now we're talking! just keep working and you'll find how fun and painful it can be sometimes to write something deep and meaningful.
    I enjoyed this one
     
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    fallenangel

    fallenangel Well-Known Member

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    ya think that this is the best one yet?

    funny, this just happened to be the very first one i wrote and i was sooo mad when i wrote it!
     
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    Il inno di morte

    Il inno di morte A noi si schiude il ciel...

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    well, the other ones arent bad, but i believe this one is specially powerful.
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    i think this one is better as well.
    And if you wrote it when you where mad then you can more easily get those emotions on paper. just when you write. Don't think. let it flow from you mind to your pen. Dont interupt it. Your emotions are always more powerful than logic and reasoning. Dont even try to rhyme. just write what is in your heart. and you will have a great poem.
     
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    fallenangel

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    yes i am trying to write with my heart and not my head :rolleyes:
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    I like the short poems, keep it up.
     

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