Only Lived To Eighteen

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    Linja

    Linja Good. Be magnanimous. Über Member

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    Where did she go?
    She’s not gone anywhere
    It seems her heart has run away
    It doesn’t matter if they stare

    All of her memories
    Buried in her mind
    They’ve all given up
    She’s too hard to find

    She’s sitting there
    Watching
    Watching them
    Trying

    They try so hard
    To bring her back
    Bring back the beauty
    Bring back the love
    Bring back the Angel
    That fell from above

    Her love was so bright
    It was powerful, splendid
    Her blood was so red
    It was beautiful, unrivalled

    The way it ran down her arms
    The way it slid past her stomach
    The way it will
    Never flow quite free again

    Where is she hiding?
    She ran away long ago
    Did she do it on purpose?
    Did she really mean it?

    All the questions are left unanswered
    All the answers are left unsaid
    Her beauty is cold, her passion is frozen
    But there’s really no choice, she’s nothing but dead
    Her hopes are shattered, her dreams came crashing down
    But there’s really no choice, not in her head

    The choice that she has
    Isn’t really a choice
    Just like the voice that she has
    Isn’t really a voice

    A whisper, spoken softly
    A scream, ringing clear
    A silent death, slowly
    She felt herself disappear
    Into the shadow
    Into the abyss

    Somehow, she knows
    Somehow, she feels
    That though she only lived to eighteen
    She was dead long ago
     
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    arT saveS

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    Hmm...I'm split on this song. There are some very well written verses, but then there are some that could use some work. It's not bad at all though. Good job. :)
     
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    matttheskwirl14

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    i like it. nice job.
     
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    bleeding rose

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    Love it... It's great! Quite powerful which i like. Keep it up!! ;)
     
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    Linja

    Linja Good. Be magnanimous. Über Member

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    Thank you all. Faajpe, thanks for the constructive criticism, can you tell me which ones you didn't like, and I can work on them. Cheers.
     
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