One piece (of you)

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    Seinfeld

    Seinfeld We are the nobodies LPA Super Member

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    One piece (of you):

    Aren't you happy?

    You have everything there is and a whole lot more
    Not even my love seems to touch your frozen core
    Won't you please show me what's beneath your bleeding facade
    Your exterior strengthened by the pain and broken promises inside

    I want a piece, a piece of what you claim you are
    I want a piece, a piece of your reopened scars
    I want a piece, just a piece of what's brought you so far

    I'm so frustrated...

    I see what you posess surpasses all I could ever reach
    I'm crushed by the fact that not even affection could make you breach
    Now it's my turn to shut you out of my heart as you've done before
    Knowing that even when not shown towards the outside my heart will stay sore

    I want a piece, a piece of what you claim you are
    I want a piece, a piece of your reopened scars
    I want a piece, just a piece of what's brought you so far

    It's over, I'm giving up...

    Every single step closer to you takes me further away from me
    And I think the time has finally come for me to see that we aren't meant to be
    Each time I yell you're screaming back to prove the strength you say you have
    I won't go on like this anymore and it's your fault I fear my pulse is running flat

    I've become that piece, that piece of what you claim you are
    I've become that piece, that piece of your reopened scars
    I've become that piece, that piece of what's kept you where you are
    And I want myself back but I've sunken too far



    Mhh...hope you guyz like it?...if not...hoo givz?...(I do :p)
     
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    miny_girl_LP

    miny_girl_LP wow the dark side has cookies!I'm there!

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    You never cease to amaze me!I love it!!
    It's official i'm your biggest fan!Ever!
     
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    nari

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    thats intense i love it !!!
     
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    Seinfeld

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    yet again....thankies... ^_^
     
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    esaul17

    esaul17 antichrist

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    I like it. Some of line lines seemed a little awkward, but IO love the "courses" and the progression. Great job.
     
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    lief92

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    agreed, a bit awkward. but its really great. i wanna write like that!
     
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    Seinfeld

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    Thank you ^_^
     

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