One and the Same

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    a life in ashes

    a life in ashes mercury summer

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    One and the Same

    Breathing, never breathing,
    It's been so long, we've tried so hard,
    But when you think of it like this,
    It's just so much like dust,

    Ancient time smothered in liquid pain,
    Putrid words and my lies,
    My bones laid to rest at last,
    Till you revive me to fight again,

    So long, So gone, Shut up,
    And learn from past mistakes,
    Don't feel, Don't think, Death blooms,
    We're one and the same,

    My reflection's trapped in light,
    A little fragment of darkness,
    Spit it out as you fall from grace,
    On your voyage of no return,

    So long, So gone, Shut up,
    And learn from past mistakes,
    Don't feel, Don't think, Death blooms,
    We're one and the same,

    No more time, Time to make your choice,
    Choices taken for you, You can't see,
    Oh fragile one,

    You will not have me,
    My past will once again swallow me,
    Something about you stirs me,
    I'm so sick of me,
    Give to time the rest of me,
    Get living or get dying,

    So long, So gone, Shut up,
    And learn from past mistakes,
    Don't feel, Don't think, Death blooms,
    We're one and the same.
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    Well done. I felt that some of the verses were to short, not that i don't like short verses just when you have a chorus i feel like i'm reading so little and then there comes the chorus again. But other than that i foud it quite good. Keep it up. ;)
     
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    fallenangel

    fallenangel Well-Known Member

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    thought this was pretty good!

    really liked this bit...

     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

    lp_sk8ergurl Well-Known Member

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    It was good.
     
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    Christopher

    Christopher Über Member Über Member

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    Gr8 writing ^_^
     

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