On The Day Of My Funeral

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    Linja

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    True, I started this off as a happy poem and couldn't resist adding the last line. Tell me what you think, puh-lease.

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    On The Day Of My Funeral

    On the day of my funeral​

    I want bluebells and roses
    Sunflowers and lilies
    Their scents to fill the air
    I want every breath to be a pleasure
    I want life to be full of beauty

    And I want the water to be a clear blue
    The grass a luscious green
    I want the sky to be a patchwork quilt
    I want birds to be heard and seen

    I want the sun to be as bright and passionate
    As ancient legends describe it
    I want the moon’s cold grace to not only live in fantasies
    And I want the stars to twinkle and shine

    I will cut these satin ropes I tied down myself
    And let my freedom enliven my circulation

    I want my life back
    I don’t want to spend all time sitting behind metaphorical bars
    Because I’m afraid of what the future might bring
    I’m tired of being scared of what the future might not bring

    I want to come out of my shell and live
    I’m not going to be held back
    I’m not going to hold myself back

    And I want soft, fluffy clouds to travel the sky
    I want baby soft petals of roses
    I want butterflies to roam around
    And the air to be pleasant and fresh

    I will cut these satin ropes I tied down myself
    And let my freedom enliven my circulation

    And I want berries to ripen
    And flowers to bloom
    I want ice to melt and rivers to flow
    Waterfalls like rainbows and only soft, powdery snow
    I want snowflakes to be crystal clear and endure, not melt away
    I want people to remember with tenderness, not with bitter, angry hate

    On the day of my funeral
     
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    Chaos

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    That is pretty intense...


    ...in other words I like it.
     
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    JJ

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    good descriptive word for this poem - and yeh chaos is totally right
     
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    Beauitful it makes me think about the afterlife in only words it's good
     
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    esaul17

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    Nice job.
     
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    Good Work.

    I really liked reading that...Good Work!
     
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    Linja

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    Thankees to you all ^_^
     
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    Darcy

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    Beautiful, it's like a fantasy book in poem form. For some reason, when I read it I think of it as a more curious/enlightened take on dying. So I think you are very capable of being optimistic, it's just hidden.

    Anyway, I think you did a lovely job on this.
     
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    El Muerto

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    Quite a different approach to the old familiar subject, very interesting...You did a fabulous job Mali!
     
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    Linja

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    Thanks you two, that means a lot to me ^_^
     
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    This is really an awesome job. Congradulations from I hesh.
     
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    Linja

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    Congratulations*

    ^_^ Thanks, Heshboy.
     
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    Darcy

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    I'd also like to say that I love you for correcting his spelling. That is also a habit of mine. ^_^

    Also, every time I read this poem, I like it even more. I'm still enjoying it.
     
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    heshboy

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    XD I spell how the word sounds.
     
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    Linja

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    Getchoo: Great minds think alike ^_^ Thank you.

    Heshboy: Spell as you like, I'll always be there to correct you :lol:
     
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    natalie_16_2k5

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    GREAT JOB. I LOVE IT!
     
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    Linja

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    Thank you ^_^
     
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    damn good

    wow mali this is pretty damn good
    i lov it
    its made to be sad but its actually beautiful and happy
    except for the last line and the title lolz
    i luv it and i miss ya loadz!
    god...hate to say it but
    ur doing WAY better than me...man i havnt been on or posted anythin in such a long time lol
    ur amazing n so is ur work KEEP IT ON!
    ciao |leila|
     
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    Linja

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    Thanks hon, I miss you! ^_^
     
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    it was so nature(y), i liked it *two thumbs up* very William Wordsworthish.
     

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