No Point Verse 1: Every damn day of my life I wish I could leave this world behind cuz now that you're gone there's no point for me to go on Pre chorus: So tell me what to do So I can be with you Chorus: cuz there's no point for me to live in this world without you girl so now I'm going to put my life to an end and I’ll close my eyes and pretend that nothing has happened till I'll wake up in heaven holding your hands again Verse 2: Since the day you left I’ve been depressed Of this life that I blame for your death And all I need is a place to rest Up in heaven where your love is Pre chorus: So tell me what to do So I can be with you Chorus: bridge: I’m so scared To put my life to and end But it won’t take more than a second And then I can see your face again Chorus
Thats pretty good! I would try making it a little longer although I have trouble writing longer ones myself. Nice Work!
Chorus: Awesome Verses: Suck. No they're not that bad. But they aren't too great. It's not all about length, but the rhyme and rhythm isn't so hot. Bridge: Fits in quite nicely. Comments: The verses kill the song. I mean, you would have a 8 half if not for your no good verses. (6 half/10)