No More Patience Verse 1: I’ve been running for hours And I’m gonna keep on going forever Till I reach the edge of the world Jump from there and get destroyed Cuz from the first day that I was born My life’s been nothing but miserable And now all I want is for this disease to let me go So separate me from my lonely soul Chorus: Its too late No more patience I have to separate Before I bleed again Verse 2: I’ve been looking for the highest cliff A cliff that’ll end my ####ed up life Cuz I’m too tired of living my life like this I need to end this pain that’s killing me inside Cuz from the day that I lost hope My life’s been nothing but an endless road And now all I want is to feel love So take me away cuz I’ve had enough Chorus: Its too late No more patience I have to separate Before I bleed again Bridge: I’m pushing myself away But I’m addicted to this life But I’ll keep on fighting everyday Till I feel I found a light Chorus: Its too late No more patience I have to separate Before I bleed again
it's pretty alright.. you're a good writer.. it's just sad.. thats all.. wow.. im in a sad mood now.. anywho.. keep it up dude! ^^
It's good, I like it a lot. I give it a 9/10. There are 2 things I don't like.. 1. I'm not into the chorus just because of how short it is. 2. It's another "Pain on the inside" song. If you take out all the references to killing me inside, then it will be a lot better and more respected. "The Pain Inside' is just to overused. And now suicidal songs are gonna be overused also. Here we go in another circle.
I've changed the song and for the chorus, I kinda like writing a short chorus...I don't know why though
I've changed the song and for the chorus, I kinda like writing a short chorus...I don't know why though [/b][/quote] I still liked it, even if you didn't change it. Everyone has their own writing technique, you shouldn't change it just because people say you should, unless you think you should. But it's still very good!
I still liked it, even if you didn't change it. Everyone has their own writing technique, you shouldn't change it just because people say you should, unless you think you should. But it's still very good! [/b][/quote] no I changed it because your right, I did use alot of the word "pain" in this song and I felt that i needed to change it.
no I changed it because your right, I did use alot of the word "pain" in this song and I felt that i needed to change it. [/b][/quote] Ok, as long as you also thought you should change it. Sorry, it just bothers me when people do stuff cause others think they should. People should do what feels right to them, and if it doesn't feel right to someone else...well f*ck them.
Its ok, I needed someone to tell me to change the song. i wasn't happy with it anyway and you helped me improve it, so thanks Any more comments?